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EXTRA CREDIT: G20 SUMMIT

The G20 summit is a meeting between the top 20 economies in the world taking about the worlds international financial system. Twice a year these countries come together and twice a year there are major protest/riots happening. What caught my eye is what happened on September 24th and 25th in Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania. On Monday November 16th, I attended a conference where 5 people introduced what actually happened in Pittsburgh during this years G20 summit. I was shocked to hear and to actually see what happened in videos that were on the Internet. How can the UNITED STATES government actually let that happened. The most shocking this to me was what happened at the University of Pittsburgh. On this night, Police/ SWAT team used combat like tactics to stop the protesting that was happening on the streets of the University. Not only were those who were protesting hurt, but those not associated with anything were. The use of tear gas was used to stop the protesting, but the most shocking thing was that the police used the LRAD sonic gun. This sonic gun, which has only been used in the IRAQ WAR, is a very high pitch sound that hurts you physically. It was shocking to see that the police had to use tactics used only for the war in Iraq on United States soil to hurt United states citizens. What was also shocking is that all this protest is allowed under our constitution, and the police have no right to stop us. Our free speech was taken away, and people were placed in jail for no reason. The police did not even give the students/ civilians a change to stop and go home/dorm rooms. They blocked them from every corner not letting them go anywhere. This years G20 summit opened my eyes, and its going to be interesting if the government to do anything about what happened in Pittsburgh.

work cited

WORK CITED:

1) "Teen Car Accidents. Teenage Car Crashes." caraccident.com. 2008. Web. 25 Oct 2009. .

2) "Cell Phones + Teen Drivers = Danger?." Current Events 107.5 (2007): 7. Academic Search Complete. EBSCO. Web. 25 OCT. 2009.

3) "Senate Bill 33 - The Teen Driver Cell Phone Ban." DrivingLaws.org. July 2008. Web. 25 Oct 2009. .

4) "National Teen Driving Statistics." RMIIA. 28 FEB 2007. Rocky Mountain Insurance Information Association, Web. 25 Oct 2009. .

5) Larry, Copeland "Distractions challenge teen drivers." USA Today n.d.: Academic Search Complete. EBSCO. Web. 25 Oct. 2009.

NEW POST: TEEN DRIVING

Laws for teenage driving should be stricter to decrease the leading cause of teenage death. By getting their license at a young age, teenage drivers (ages 15- 19) do not fully understand the responsibility of driving and are therefore reckless drivers. They commit unlawful actions like text messaging, talking on the phone, speeding, not wearing a seat belt, and driving under the influence, while putting both their lives and lives of others in danger. However, laws already exist to prevent these types of actions, like “The Teen Driver Cell Phone Ban” in California {3}, but they are not strongly enforced and the punishment is a small fine. This needs to change, the laws need to be strongly enforced and the punishment for anyone caught committing an offense should be more severe. With stricter laws in place for teenage driving, more teenage lives and lives of others would be saved.


Driving is a privilege for teenagers, and sometimes that privilege can be fatal. "Car fatalities result in 36% of teenage deaths. That’s more than 5,000 teen deaths a year, and roughly 400,000 are severely injured {1}." How can the United States government let this happen? If states just created stricter laws for teenage drivers, all these statistics would decrease. States can increase the penalties and fines of all the illegal actions teenage drivers commit. For examples, if you are caught text messaging or talking on the phone, you should get a fine of $500 and get your license suspended for one month. If you are driving under the influence, you should be given a fine of $2,500 and get your license revoked for 12 months. If you are speeding, you should be given a fine of $250 and depending on how fast you are going your license should be taken away. For every 5 mph you are over, your license should be suspended an extra month. With these laws in place, it would put a sense of fear in teenage drivers and they will stop performing illegal actions.


Many believe that strict laws already exist, and if they didn’t help before, how would it help this time? Even if states create stricter laws, it should be for all drivers not just for teens. Adults break the laws just like teens do and if the laws are changed, then they should be equal. A lot of people complain that teens are inexperience drivers that are just reckless. But, how can they be experience drivers with all these laws preventing them to drive. It shouldn't be the governments job to create stricter laws, it should the parents creating stricter rules. Also, teens are already careful drivers since their car insurance is really high, they don't want to risk making it higher. With all these laws being created it will just put fear in teen drivers, which would just make them worse drivers. Grace H., a teen for Louisville stated “If you want to put a ban on something that distracts people from driving, you might as well ban everything that could be considered a distraction like [passengers] or food. {2}” On the other hand, stricter laws are just necessary for teens because "teenage drivers are 4 times more likely to get in a car accident then all other drivers {1}."


Speeding plays a major factor in teenage fatalities. In a survey that conducted 1,000 teens, "69% said that they speed to keep up with traffic and 64% say they speed to run a yellow light {4}." That just proves that teens make reckless decisions, which increase the percentage of getting into an accident. There is no reason to speed. you get to the same place 5 to 10 minutes later with out speeding. Is that a reason to risk your life or lives of others? Teenage drivers also drink and drive, which is the worse thing anyone can do. In a survey done by "US TODAY, 50% of teenager say they see other teens drink and drive.{5}" If your going to drink, even though it's illegal to drink under the age of 21, get a taxi or call a friend to to pick you up. Know how your going to get home before you start drinking, don't believe that a beer or two has no affect.



Recently, the cell phone has increased the cause of teenage fatalities. "Seventeen states, including Washington D.C. have passed a bill banning and restricting the use of the cell phone for teenage drivers 18 and under {2}." Governor Schwarzenegger from California was quoted saying “The simple fact is that teenage drivers are more easily distracted. {2}” In a study of teenage driving, "when a teen uses their cell phone 53.8% of the time they cross the line on the road.{2}" Kelly R., a teen driver of Reno, Nev., said texting is a big distraction, “I actually tried it once while driving and got honked at because my head was looking practically at my feet. {2}” The cell phone is a teens best friend, but while you drive put it aside. One second makes a big difference, and the cell phone just acts as a big distraction.


With stricter laws in place for teen drivers, the number of teen fatalities would decrease. With harsh fines and stricter penalties, a sense of fear would be placed in the minds of teenage drivers that would prevent them from committing unlawful actions. Teens need to be taught a lesson, and unless they experience consequences for their actions they will never learn.

essay draft: TEEN DRIVING

Laws for teenage driving should be stricter to decrease the leading cause of teenage death. By getting their license at a young age, teenage drivers (ages 15- 19) do not fully understand the responsibility of driving and are therefore reckless drivers. They commit unlawful actions like text messaging, talking on the phone, speeding, not wearing a seat belt, and driving under the influence, while putting both their lives and lives of others in danger. However, laws already exist to prevent these types of actions, like “The Teen Driver Cell Phone Ban” in California, but they are not strongly enforced and the punishment is a small fine. This needs to change, the laws need to be strongly enforced and the punishment for anyone caught committing an offense should be more severe. With stricter laws in place for teenage driving, more teenage lives and lives of others would be saved.

Driving is a privilege for teenagers, and sometimes that privilege can be fatal. Car fatalities result in 36% of teenage deaths. That’s more than 5,000 teen deaths a year, and roughly 400,000 are severely injured (Car-accidents.com). Out of all car crashes, 12.9% are by drivers ages 16- 20 (rmiia.org). How can the United States government let this happen? If states just created stricter laws for teenage drivers, all these statistics would decrease. States can increase the penalties and fines of all the illegal actions teenage drivers commit. For examples, if you are caught text messaging or talking on the phone, you should get a fine of $500 and get your license suspended for one month. If you are driving under the influence, you should be given a fine of $2,500 and get your license revoked for 12 months. If you are speeding, you should be given a fine of $250 and depending on how fast you are going your license should be taken away. For every 5 mph you are over, your license should be suspended an extra month. With these laws in place, it would put a sense of fear in teenage drivers and they will stop performing illegal actions.

Many believe that strict laws already exist, and they didn’t help before, how would it help this time. Even if states create stricter laws, it should be for all drivers not just for teens. Adults break the laws just like teens do and if the laws are changed, then they should be equal. A lot of people complain that teens are inexperience drivers that are just reckless. But, how can they be experience drivers with all these laws are preventing them to drive. With all these laws being created it will just put fear in teen drivers, which would just make them worse drivers. Grace H., a teen for Louisville stated “If you want to put a ban on something that distracts people from driving, you might as well ban everything that could be considered a distraction like [passengers] or food.” On the other hand, stricter laws are just necessary for teens because teenage drivers are 4 times more likely to get in a car accident then all other drivers (car-accidents.com).

Speeding plays a major factor of teenage fatalities. In a survey that conducted 1,000 teens, 69% said that they speed to keep up with traffic and 64% say they speed to run a yellow light (rmiia.org). That just proves that teens make reckless decisions, which increase the percentage of getting into an accident. They also drink and drive, which is the worse thing anyone can do. In a survey done by US TODAY, 50% of teenager say they see other teens drink and drive, which results in 23% of all teenage automobile deaths (car-accidents.com). Recently, the cell phone has increased the cause of teenage fatalities. Seventeen states, including Washington D.C. have passed a bill banning and restricting the use of the cell phone for teenage drivers 18 and under (“cell phone+ teen driver= danger?”). Governor Schwarzenegger from California was quoted saying “The simple fact is that teenage drivers are more easily distracted.” In a study of teenage driving, when a teen uses their cell phone 53.8% of the time they cross the line on the road. Kelly R., a teen driver of Reno, Nev., said texting is a big distraction, “I actually tried it once while driving and got honked at because my head was looking practically at my feet.”

With stricter laws in place for teen drivers, the number of teen fatalities would decrease. With harsh fines and stricter penalties, a sense of fear would be placed in the minds of teenage drivers that would prevent them from committing unlawful actions. Teens need to be taught a lesson, and unless they experience consequences for their actions they will never learn.

THESIS STATEMENT DRAFT #3

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New thesis paragraph:

Laws for teenage driving should be stricter to decrease the leading cause of teenage death. By getting their license at a young age, teenage drivers do not fully understand the responsibility of driving and are therefore reckless drivers. They commit unlawful actions like text messaging, talking on the phone, speeding, and driving under the influence, while putting both their lives and lives of others in danger. Coincidentally, laws already exist to prevent these types of actions, like “The Teen Driver Cell Phone Ban” in California, but they are not strongly enforced and the punishment is a small fine. This needs to change, the laws need to be strongly enforced and the punishment for anyone caught committing an offense should be more severe. If you are caught text messaging or talking on the phone, you should get a fine of $500 and get your license suspended for one month. If you are driving under the influence, you should be given a fine of $2,500 and get your license revoked for 12 months. If you are speeding, you should be given a fine of $750 and depending on how fast you are going your license should be taken away. For every 5 mph you are over, your license should be suspended an extra month. With stricter laws in place for teenage driving, more teenage lives and lives of others would be saved.

Old thesis paragraph:

Laws for teenage driver should be stricter to decrease the leading cause of teenage death. By getting their license at a young age, teenage drivers do not fully understand the responsibility of driving and are therefore reckless drivers. They commit unlawful actions, like text messaging, talking on the phone, speeding, and even driving under the influence, while driving and put their lives and lives of others in danger. In some states, like the State of California, laws already exist to prevent these types of action, but they are not strongly enforced or the punishment is a small fine. This needs to change, the laws need to be strongly enforced and the punishment for anyone caught committing an offense should be more severe. If you are caught using your cell phone to text message or to talk to someone, you should get a fine of $500 and get your license suspended for one month. If you are driving under the influence, you should be given a fine of $1500 and get your license suspended for 12 months. If you are speeding, you should be given a fine of $750 and depending on how fast you are going your license should be suspended. Ever 5 mph you are over, you license should be suspended an extra month. With stricter laws in place for teenage driving more teenage lives and lives of others would be saved.

NEW LITERACY

REVISED:
In the article “Clive Thompson on the New Literacy”, Thompson writes about how technology has an big impact on our writing. I agree with Andrea Lunsford, a Professor at Stanford University, who believes “technology isn't killing our ability to write, it's reviving it.” With the internet, people in today’s world write more often than before. With social networking websites like Facebook and chats online, it has allowed people to communicate with text then in earlier generations. In today’s world, professor Lunsford realized that when students write for an audience it “gives them a different sense of what constitutes good writing.” With a class assignment, students consider the professor not to be an audience therefore; they are “less enthusiastic about their in-class writing.” With the internet reviving the way we write, “Knowing who you're writing for and why you're writing might be the most crucial factor of all.”

As a teen in today's world it is true that technology is the new literacy of today's world. Everyday, its seems that everything i do has to do with some form or technology. Basically, technology rules the world. I believe that if there was not this much technology not that many people will write. Technology gives you the opportunity to read and especially write more. If its a text message, a blog response, or a chat response you are still creating some form of writing. It may seem that old traditional reading are becoming extinct like the newspaper, but with new technology people would be able to access the same newspaper on the internet or on the go with their cell phones. to me, new technology is the best way.
Question:
1. Is this article any different than the other articles we have read?
2. Do you agree that “technology isn't killing our ability to write, it's reviving it” or is it actually killing our ability to write.
3. Is the internet to really blame for the change in writing?


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OLD:

In the article “Clive Thompson on the New Literacy”, Thompson writes about how technology has an impact on our writing. I agree with Andrea Lunsford, a Professor at Stanford University, who believes “technology isn't killing our ability to write, it's reviving it.” With the internet, people in today’s world write more often than before. With social networking websites like Facebook and chats online, it has allowed people to communicate with text then in earlier generations. In today’s world, professor Lunsford realized that when students write for an audience it “gives them a different sense of what constitutes good writing.” With a class assignment, students consider the professor not to be an audience therefore; they are “less enthusiastic about their in-class writing.” With the internet reviving the way we write, “Knowing who you're writing for and why you're writing might be the most crucial factor of all.”
Question:
1. Is this article any different than the other articles we have read?
2. Do you agree that “technology isn't killing our ability to write, it's reviving it” or is it actually killing our ability to write.
3. Is the internet to really blame for the change in writing?